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Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit the teenagers and the community as well. Do you agree or disagree? Give your own opinion.

The debate over whether
teenagers
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 should be required to do unpaid
community
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work
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 has intensified in recent years.
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 opinions differ, I believe
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work
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 should be compulsory because it strengthens social cohesion and builds
community
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 identity among young people.
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community
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 service promotes social cohesion. When
teenagers
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work
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 with residents of different ages on local tasks—
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 as tidying public spaces or assisting at
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 events—they interact face to face rather than relying only on the internet for help. These shared efforts revive the habit of neighbours supporting one another.
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, when students help clean the streets near their school, they collaborate with shop owners and local volunteers, and the entire area becomes safer and cleaner. In
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 way, both the
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 benefits and
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teenagers
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the teenagers
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 learn how cooperation solves everyday problems.
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compulsory service fosters a sense of identity and responsibility. Unpaid
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 provides visible results that young people can take pride in. If high-school students help maintain the streets or assist elderly residents regularly, they are more likely to keep the environment clean and care for others as they grow up. Admittedly, some
teenagers
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 may be reluctant to give up free time.
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, with limited weekly hours and a choice of suitable tasks, the requirement is reasonable and educational. In conclusion, unpaid
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work
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 not only develops social cohesion but
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 nurtures a lasting commitment to the places where
teenagers
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 live. For these reasons, it should be a compulsory part of their education now and in the future.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • required
  • unpaid
  • community work
  • benefit
  • teenagers
  • life skills
  • volunteering
  • empathy
  • compassion
  • socially aware
  • responsible
  • interact
  • diverse backgrounds
  • cultural understanding
  • tolerance
  • work experience
  • essential skills
  • employment
  • interests
  • passions
  • career development
  • contribute
  • betterment
  • development
  • local community
  • mental well-being
  • stress
  • self-esteem
  • burden
  • academic
  • personal lives
  • time management
  • support
  • balance
  • participate
  • encouraged
  • numerous benefits
  • individuals
  • conclusion
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