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Band 2.5

some people belive that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters ( such us food close and entretaiment) is likely to results in a socciety of individuals who only think abouth theyr on whishes. other people belive that it is important for children to make decisions about matters than affect them.

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people
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apply
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are sure when
make
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making
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decisions
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for children
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children
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children,
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importan
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important
but
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, but
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 in a simple
that everyday
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way
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, is likely
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to have better
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yourselve
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yourself
,
but
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other
people
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think
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different
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differently
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becouse
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because
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this
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children
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 need
about
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everything
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. for
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 that reason is the most
importan
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important
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you
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yourself
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 space for your learning. On the first hand when
children
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 make a decision about your life, have more structur and concients in yourselve, is
people
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 when working or study in the future have opinion and abilities,
for instance
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 a big proffesional need make
decisions
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children
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 he do you do like. On the second hand
people
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 think wich it is the better option for grow up and remember what it was your difficult life, for that reason
people
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 don't like when see childrens make alone
decisions
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becouse
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 it is probably bad idea, for that reason spend a lot time teaching everythink
however
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this
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children
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 grow up will have a problems when need make important
decisions
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becouse
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 will need other
people
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 for that. In
conclution
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conclusion
, it is
the
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apply
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most important when
people
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teaching everyone
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teach
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children
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make
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to make
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a
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apply
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simple or difficult
decisions
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,
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becouse
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because
 it is a good ability for your life and in the future will convert
in
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into
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preffessional
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professionals
 or good
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people
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people,
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becouse
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because
remember
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they remember
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habit
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a habit
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task response
Plan the essay. Give one view, then give ideas to back it up. Stay on topic all the time.
grammar
Write simple, short sentences. Fix big spelling and word errors to be clear.
coherence
Use easy linking words to show order and contrast: first, next, then, but, however.
examples
Give real, clear examples for your point. This will help the reader see your idea.
structure
Make a clear start and a short end. Put the main idea in each paragraph.
content
You do try to talk about both sides of the topic.
structure
There is a plan of order with first and second hand.
content
Some words show you know the task.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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