Most people don’t care enough about environmental issues. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

There have been a lot of critical concerns recently. One of the most important ones is environmental problems. It has been said that
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of the population
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to pay attention to these concerns. I disagree with
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to a large extent, and I am going to elaborate on
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in the following. It can be seen that global warming has affected all aspects of our
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, and we cannot deny that many
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know their
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the end. In
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situation, they prefer to stop the negative effects of climate change. They
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different methods to protect the environment with the help of various activities, which are introduced by the governments. A lot of public
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been provided for
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.
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, they are persuaded to
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them
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of using their personal car to emit less
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to the atmosphere. Because of
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, they prevent air pollution and protect the environment.
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,
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are more aware
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deforestation, which leads to
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a threat
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biodiversity. In
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way, not only are all types of creatures in danger, but
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condition can
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impact
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human health.
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, they cooperate in planting trees to compensate the deforestation and preserve the natural creatures.
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, as there has been much bad news about decreasing natural resources, most
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have been encouraged to manage their
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according to
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recent news.
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, many
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would rather
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recycle all the recyclable substances like papers, plastics, glass jars, and metal bottles.
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, these products return to the factories to
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again in different industries.
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, factories’ raw materials are ready, and there is no need
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excessive
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of natural reserves.
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,
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try not to waste
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energy
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like water, electricity, and gas. Sometimes, they find alternative ways and bring renewable energy into their
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to cut down their consumption.
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, more ecological resources will remain for the next generation. Despite all the discussion, some
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don’t consider
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natural trend is related to human activities, and they don’t take positive action for that. But there are a lot of records which explain that human activities are closely linked to environmental issues, and we have to
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to mitigate the effects as
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many
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do
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. In conclusion,
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some
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have
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perspective that we don’t need to participate in environmental projects,
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of the population make their effort to preserve
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nature.

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coherence
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idea
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Linking words for giving examples:

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