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Band 2.5

Governments give lots of support to artists, even though some people think it is a waste of money that could have been spent better elsewhere. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There is no denying the fact that
artists
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had
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have
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affect
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in
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apply
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out
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our
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life
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 in different ways.
While
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 it is a commonly held belief that
We
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we
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 should support
artists
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 , there is
also
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 an argument that we must
senpding
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spend
 our money in
better
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a better
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 way.
This
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 essay will analyse
this
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 topic from both points and express my opinion. On one hand, the artist has considerable value to the
people
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.
In other
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words,
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eny
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every
 country
have
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has
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culture
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a culture
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they
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that it
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 can
showing
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 by
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artists
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its artists
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.
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for make
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to making
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peoples
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people
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happy
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 we ought to
encourge
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encourage
artists
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, if
people
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the
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apply
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day
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day,
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 when they
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finish
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finsh,
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 they need something to make them happy.
On the other hand
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, some
people
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thing
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think
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 there are
a
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apply
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significant
way
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ways
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 we can
spent
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spend
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 money
for
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on
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 it. It i possible to say that education and
heath
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health
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 are more substantial
to
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than
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 spending.
Moreover
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, we must focus
for
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 what
it
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apply
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is important for
as
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us
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 and for our kids.
For instance
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, we can not
spent
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spend
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 money on
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an artist
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 if there are some
people
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 sick or hungry. In conclusion, there are no easy answers to
this
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 question. On balance,
however
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, I tend to believe that
artists
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 that we should focus
what
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on what
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it
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is
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 essential today in our
live
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lives
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like
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, like
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 education and health.

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grammar
Spelling and grammar need big improvement. Fix common mistakes like 'affect' (effect), 'spend' (spending), 'We' (we), 'artist' (artists). Use simple, correct sentences.
planning
Plan your essay before writing. Start with a short intro that states the topic and your view. End with a clear conclusion that restates your position.
structure
Keep one main idea per paragraph. Start each paragraph with a topic sentence and then add a simple reason or example.
content
Support each point with a short, real example or reason from everyday life to make it clear.
coherence
Link sentences with basic connectives (and, but, so, because) to show how ideas fit together.
lexical accuracy
Check common spelling and word form, especially for words like 'artists', 'spending', 'health', and 'education'.
idea balance
The essay tries to discuss both sides of the issue.
structure
There is a clear final view stated at the end.
progress
Basic plan and some effort to explain why artists matter.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • government patronage
  • cultural heritage
  • national identity
  • creative industries
  • unnecessary expense
  • essential services
  • democratize
  • private patronage
  • market forces
  • innovation
  • boost tourism
  • subjective nature
  • allocated ineffectively
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