The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in Manchester city centre from 2003-2012.

The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in Manchester city centre from 2003-2012.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in Manchester city centre from 2003-2012.
The line graph presents the
numbers
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number
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of
a
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committed crimes (burglary,car theft,robbery) in Manchester City between 2003 to 2012.
Overall
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it
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shown in the graph, the trends vary across the compared areas. Burglary has experienced a significant drop that
continued
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has continued
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for some years.
while
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,
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car theft showed a gradual increase. Robbery
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on
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, on
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the other hand, was slightly stable. Burglary scored
for
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the highest
done
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crime
in
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rate in
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2003 with nearly 3,500
then
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,
it
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then it
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increased to 3,700 in the following year before sharply
drooped
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dropping
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to 1100 in 2008. In
2009
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2009,
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it rose to nearly 1500
after
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; after
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that, it showed unnoticed changes from 2010 to 2012. Car theft
illustrate
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illustrates
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a small buildup trend starting with 2400 in 2003 to roughly 3000 in 2012.
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in
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contrast to those
to
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groups, robbery was the only one that
display
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displayed
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a pattern with no dramatic changes. 600 in 2003
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then
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,
a
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then a
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single increase to 900 in 2005, but
,
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it went down again in the following year to 600
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, that
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that
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which
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went
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remained
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until 2012.

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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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