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In your school, one of your friends has been feeling down and demotivated. You take it as your responsibility to cheer him/her up and do this via a Birthday party invitation. Write to your classmates and talk about organizing the party. Please include • the reason behind the party • the location of the party • discuss any other arrangements You should write between 150-200 words.

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Dear Classmates, I hope you are doing well. I am writing to suggest organizing a surprise birthday party for our friend Payal. Lately, she has been feeling a bit low, and I believe
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 would be a wonderful way to cheer her up and show our support. The party can take place at Madar Hall, Pune, and I suggest we plan it for Saturday, December 14, 2024. It will be a casual yet fun event where everyone can come together to celebrate and make Payal feel special. For the arrangements, we can all contribute to the decorations, food, and drinks. A cake is a must, and we could
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 plan some simple games or activities to make the event more lively.
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, it would be great if everyone could bring a small gift or a handwritten card to add a personal touch. Please let me know your thoughts and availability for the date. I am sure, with everyone’s support, we can make
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 party a memorable one for her. Best regards, Mitali Padiya

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Coherence and Cohesion
Consider breaking down the arrangements section into more detailed bullet points or separate ideas in different paragraphs to enhance clarity.
Task Achievement
You've addressed all the required points: the reason for the party, the location, and other arrangements, comprehensively and clearly.
Task Achievement
The letter maintains a respectful and friendly tone throughout, which is well-suited for the context.
Coherence and Cohesion
The structure of the letter, with a greeting, body, and closing, is well-organized and easy to follow.
Coherence and Cohesion
You have used clear paragraphing to separate different ideas, such as the reason, location, and arrangements for the party.
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