The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010.

The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010.
The graph illustrates the
leusire activitivites
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leisure activities
of older people in the United
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betweeb
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between
1980 and 2010.
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,
it is clear that
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the
activites
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activities
in reading, hiking, watching TV, and surfing the
interneted
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internet
had
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shown an increase, except for
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theatre
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the 1980's
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, 60% elderly people loved spending time
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watching tvand it was the highest level. The trend kept gradually rising, reaching
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peak at just 70% in
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the 2000's
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, before dropping
slighlty
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slightly
to around 65%
at the end
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of the period. In
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contrast
, 20% of
this
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group started hiking , which was the second lowest among others. It rose dramatically, peaking at 80%, which made it the biggest rate, surpassing that of reading.
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proportion was the second top at the beginning, at 50%, which was 20% higher than that of reading. Noticeably, it experienced a slight decline by 5%,
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45%, before having
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and it
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lowest number recorded in
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the 2010's
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2010's
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.
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, reading
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continually
showed a dramatic incline by 30% in the
last
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period , exceeding that of theather , at 60%, making it the top three. Starting at the lowest number at just around 5% in the first year, surfing's rate
moderatelly
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moderately
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to around 15% in
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the 2000's
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2000's
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. From
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year onwards, it
contiually
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continuously
climbed by approximately 15%,
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50%.

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