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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. ​​Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The illustrations provide details in regard to Porth Harbour changes in the
last
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 25 years.
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, the developments shaped along the lines of inhabitants and the tourist industry's demands
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have turned the harbour into a more functional area and attractive resorts. Some eye-catching changes are
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shaped
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 in the area. In detail, in the north part, there was just one dock in 2000 , which is doubled now, and in the southeast section, the disused castle is transformed into a hotel, accompanied by a private beach in the southwest of the building
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 assigned to the hotel.
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, a building was established for a cafe & shop in the central part.
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, the allocation of certain sections is changed, without any construction process. Namely, two specific areas: the Marina ( private yachts) and the Fishing boats, were reversed. And accessibility to the car park, which was from the road in 2000, has changed to the main road.

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Task response
Start with a short view that says what was in 2000 and what it looks like now.
Coherence
Use easy link words, like and, then, also, but to join ideas.
Content
Explain changes in order: what was before, then what happened after.
Language
Use only simple words, kept plain style.
Detail
The essay names some clear places and changes, like the north part and the hotel.
Content
It shows the main changes that make the harbour more useful.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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