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Band 3.5

Everyone should be required to stay in school til age of 18 . To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

Educational institutions should decide the
age
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in
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at
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 which a child can move on
for
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to
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 their
further
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 education.
While
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this
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 would limit the number of
under aged
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 teenagers going to higher institutions, I believe every person should move on with their studies regardless of their
age
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.
Age
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 does not amount to the
intelligience
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intelligence
 of a person. People believe that the older you get, the more your IQ increases. Some
students
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 are gifted, so they excel without any
hinderance
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hindrance
 and are even far better than those
above
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in
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 their
age
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 group. When you take a look at most schools, their best
students
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 are mostly the youngest in the class.
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In
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 all institutions, an examination is co-ordinated
at the end
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 of the term in order to test
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students
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students'
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 knowledge and understanding , and those who perform
good
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 get promoted to the next class.
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,
this
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 limits a
persons'
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person's
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 capability because
alot
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a lot
 of
students
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 are very sharp in their early years of life
due to
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less
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fewer
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 responsibilities. As they grow older, their zeal to study reduces
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 some get distracted.
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,
In
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 developing countries, girls are married off at an early
age
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, and when she gets
married
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married,
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 it becomes difficult for her to concentrate on her studies because she has to
takes
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 care
her
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of her
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 children and clean the house
which
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 is very mentally exhausting. In conclusion, I believe that setting certain
age
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 limitations is not necessary as it would not allow individuals
reach
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to reach
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 their full potential.

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task response
Make your position clear in the opening and restate it in the end.
coherence
Give a short reason for each idea and show how it links to the prompt.
structure
Group ideas in separate paragraphs with a clear start sentence for each.
examples
Use fixed, simple examples to back each point.
grammar
Check spelling and grammar to avoid errors that slow reading.
style
Keep short, direct sentences and use linking words to join ideas.
task response
The writer shows a clear stance that it is not right to fix the age that a student can move on.
structure
There is basic but steady structure: intro, body, and conclusion.
examples
Some examples are used to back the points.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • should
  • stay
  • in
  • school
  • till
  • age
  • 18
  • agree
  • disagree
  • time
  • learn
  • work
  • good
  • bad
  • people
  • family
  • health
  • law
  • rule
  • what
  • this
  • there
  • their
  • when
  • how
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