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The graph shows the amount of tea and coffee imported by different countries in tonnes. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main points and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the amount of tea and coffee imported by different countries in tonnes. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main points and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the proposition of
tea
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 and
coffee
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 imported by different nations, which they are,
Canada
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, the United States , the United Kingdom, and Germany.
they
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They
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 use
tonnes
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 to measure the weight.
Overall
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, most of the countries
has
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have
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larger
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a larger
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 amount of
coffee
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 imported
expect
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except
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 the UK, which
they
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apply
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has
tea
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 as
their
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its
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 highest importer by far,
alouthg
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although
 in
coffee
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 imported it
geramny
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Germany
 has the lead.
While
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 the US and
Canada
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,
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apply
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were has
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had
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 similar numbers of both
tea
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,
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apply
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 and
coffee
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. To start with,
tea
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, in
this
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case
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case,
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 the UK has a significant
numbers
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number
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 of
tonnes
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 (80,000
tonnes
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). Has been
importin
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importing
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 from all over the world,
came
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coming
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 second
Germany
Punctuation problem
, Germany
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which
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, which
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 has
great
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a great
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 figure on both of
it
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them
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, but in
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tea
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tea,
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 they were 50,000
tonnes
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.
Then
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 the US and
Canada
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which
Punctuation problem
, which
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they
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apply
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were almost the same in
tea
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 importing by around 2,0000
tonnes
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,
while
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 the US were higher and
Canada
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were
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was
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 less than 20,000.
Next,
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coffee
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, here
Germany
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Germany,
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 has
take
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taken
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 the lead and reached the peak of
coffee
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impoering
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importing
 by exactly 50,000
tonnes
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.
While
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 the US and
Canada
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 were similar again on
this
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 one,
by
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with
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 40,000
tonnes
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 of
coffee
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import
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imports
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,
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while
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apply
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the
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apply
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Canada
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were
Verb problem
had
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 less than 40,000.
Linking Words
Finally
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Finally,
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 the UK
which
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, which
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were
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was
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 the
last
Linking Words
 by only 30,000 importing
of
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apply
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coffee
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words tea, coffee, canada, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
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