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Band 6

Some consumers are increasingly choosing to buy goods that are produced in their local area, rather than imported goods. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or a negative trend?

Recently, more and more
consumers
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 are choosing to buy
goods
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 produced in their local areas rather than imported
products
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.
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 essay will discuss the reasons for
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 trend and explain why it is largely a positive development. One major reason is that locally produced
goods
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 are usually cheaper and more convenient for
consumers
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. Since these
products
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 do not need to be transported over long distances or pass through complicated customs procedures, the
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 cost is often lower.
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, when purchasing
products
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 from overseas websites,
consumers
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 often have to pay high shipping fees and wait several weeks for delivery.
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, locally produced
goods
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 can usually be delivered within a few days at a much lower cost. Another important reason is the environmental benefit. Long-distance transportation, especially by
airplanes
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 or cargo ships, produces a significant amount of carbon emissions. These emissions contribute to climate change and environmental pollution. By purchasing locally produced
goods
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, transportation distances can be reduced, which helps lower carbon emissions and protect the environment. In conclusion, people increasingly buy local
products
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 because they are cheaper, more convenient, and environmentally friendly.
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,
this
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 trend is beneficial for both
consumers
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 and the planet, and
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 should be considered a positive development.

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task response
For task response, add one more clear reason why people buy local goods, or explain one idea more fully.
task response
For task response, your opinion is clear, but you can make the positive side stronger with one more real example.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, your essay is easy to follow. To make it better, use a few more linking words like 'also' or 'as a result'.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, the second body paragraph is clear, but it is a little short. Add one more supporting sentence.
task response
For task response, you answer both questions and keep your ideas on the topic.
task response
For task response, your main ideas are clear and easy to understand.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, your essay has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, each paragraph has one main idea, so the essay is well organized.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • local economy
  • carbon footprint
  • sustainable consumption
  • supporting local businesses
  • community development
  • cultural heritage
  • self-sufficiency
  • environmental sustainability
  • imported goods
  • fresh produce
  • consumer preference
  • local producers
  • organic products
  • economic impact
  • carbon emissions
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