Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more importnant environmental problems. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In the
last
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decades, environmental issues have
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increasingly important to human beings.
Alot
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A lot
of people believe that the loss of diversity for some animal and
plants
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plant
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species is a major problem.
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some people believe that there are
much
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many
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more important environmental issues
other
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than that.
This
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essay will discuss both points of
views
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view
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and will state my opinion. On the one hand, one of the most popular concerns for environmentalists is the loss of
wild life
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wildlife
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and plant extinction.
Due to
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the current
modernized
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era, mankind has a tendency to explore the earth with no consideration of any other living creatures .
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,
expolrers
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explorers
are the most likely to invade the habitats of all
animals kingdom
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animal kingdoms
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.
More over
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, scientists are the reason for the alteration of many fruits and vegetables to
bigger
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size. The reason behind
that is
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the enhancement injection to serve
the
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mankind
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mankind's
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needs in the least costly way.
On the other hand
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, pollution is
the
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ranked as one of the
vast
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most
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majority
issue
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issues
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in the world. There is a debate
weather
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whether
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the cause of air pollution is made by individuals or
goverments
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governments
. The emissions of carbon dioxide
is
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mainly
came
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from burning fossil fuels, which is mostly caused by electric machines in some factories
,
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in contrast
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, driving large vehicles
have
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a negative impact on the air as well. Burning gas in order to turn on the engines is highly contaminating the fresh air.
To sum up
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, I firmly believe that humans must preserve the earth by saving all
kind
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kinds
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of creatures from
the
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extinctions
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extinction
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as well as
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never neglect the importance of all other environmental issues arising in the current era. In my
perpectives
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perspective
, I argue that mankind is
the main
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responsible
of
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all the environmental problems and must be aware of them and start taking
a
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serious action to prevent
such
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problems.

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task response
Make a clear plan at the start: say your view, then discuss each side with enough detail, and finish with a strong retort.
coherence
Use clear topic sentences in each paragraph and keep one main idea in each paragraph.
coherence
Use linking words to show contrast and to connect ideas (but, however, also, in addition, for example).
content
Give specific examples that relate to the idea, even simple ones about nature and people, to back up points.
accuracy
Check spelling, grammar and form: fix 'have becoming' to 'have been', 'Alot' to 'a lot', use correct plurals and articles.
structure
The essay tries to talk about both sides and ends with a view.
organization
There is an intro and a conclusion.
idea
Some ideas on habitat loss and pollution show you understand the topic.
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