Some people think that people commit crime because of poverty and social problems, while others think it is because of their bad nature. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

Some groups of individuals hold the opinion that crime results from poverty and social problems,
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others assume that it stems from a person’s bad nature. In
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essay, I will discuss both perspectives before expressing my own opinion. On the one hand, we live in a world where material resources are distributed unequally, and individuals from low socioeconomic backgrounds often struggle to survive, which may drive them to extremes.
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, police reports show that a large proportion of culprits and robbers come from lower-class families.
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, many young people cannot accept the fact that their parents cannot afford the things they desire, and
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, they may start stealing from shops or taking other people’s belongings.
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, there are many cases when children from prosperous families with loving parents become criminals. It often starts in childhood, when youngsters fail to distinguish between good and evil, and
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begin to harm animals
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as cats or dogs. Parents are sometimes unaware of
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behaviour and do not expect
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kind of cruelty from their beloved children.
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lack of moral awareness can later develop into more serious forms of antisocial behaviour.
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, social inequality can certainly lead to an increase in crime, especially among teenagers.
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, I personally believe that an individual’s evil or immoral nature should
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be taken into account, since it contributes significantly to criminal behaviour.

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structure
Plan your essay with a clear path. Start with your main view and keep it in all parts.
development
Give more precise examples for each side and use facts or examples that are easy to check.
cohesion
Use linking words to show contrast (but, yet) and add ideas in a neat way.
lexis
Keep words simple. Stick to common words from the top 100 list.
grammar
Make some sentences shorter. Break long lines into two.
structure
The essay has a clear start and end and a view is given.
task response
Two sides are shown and a view is given at the end.
development
Some good examples are used to show points.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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