Research has shown that the transportation of products and people are the main source of pollution. Some people believe government should be in charge of this, while others believe it is the fault of individuals. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Articles have stated that the carriage of products and individuals is the major reason for
pollution
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. It is thought by some that the authority should be responsible for
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,
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others think
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is an individual's mistake. On the one hand, people's efforts to decrease
pollution
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have good outcomes. Individuals can use bicycles or public
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to work or transfer their goods
instead
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of using private cars.
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,
this
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positive behaviour lowers CO2 production and air
pollution
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.
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, in the big cities, the use of bikes as the main
transport
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method leads to a great reduction in the release of harmful gases.
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, I believe
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has a limited influence on the environment.
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, the government can set rules that have a wide effect on
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all citizens. The authority increases taxes on any vehicle
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is
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products
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produces
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very
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a very
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larg
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large
amount of CO2.
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, the owners of
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cars change them or use public
transport
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to
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or carriage their products to avoid the cost of taxes.
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, in my country, the enhancement in using public
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takes place after
increasing
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of
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taxes on private
transport
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. I believe the
government
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government's
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measurements have
more
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a more
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generalised influence. In conclusion, the essay believes that
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people have positive effects on decreasing
pollution
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which
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apply
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produce
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from
transport
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, the government has the greatest and widest effects.

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task
Plan before you write. In the intro say what you will discuss and your view.
coherence
Each paragraph should have one main idea. Start with a topic sentence and then give a reason or example.
task
Explain ideas with simple proof or facts. Use short, plain sentences to show a point.
coherence
Use link words to show order and connect ideas, like first, also, but, so, for example.
task
The essay tries to cover both sides of the issue.
coherence
The writer states a view at the end and keeps to the topic.
style
Easy to read with simple words.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example
Topic Vocabulary:
  • emissions standards
  • public transportation
  • green technologies
  • environmentally friendly choices
  • carpooling
  • electric vehicles
  • market demand
  • infrastructure
  • recycling programs
  • policies and regulations
  • investment
  • innovate
  • compelling industries
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