The table and pie charts show the information about the local and international research students and their genders in 2001 and 2010

The table and pie charts show the information about the local and international research students and their genders in 2001 and 2010
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The table and pie charts show the information about the local and international research students and their genders in 2001 and 2010
While
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the table illustrates the data about the
numbers
Fix the agreement mistake
number
show examples
of research
students
Use synonyms
and whether they are international or local
researcher
Fix the agreement mistake
researchers
show examples
, the pie charts show how genders were distributed in 2001 and 2010.
Overall
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, the
students
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increased in numbers and the
indicator
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number
show examples
of international education
receivers
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recipients
show examples
has
Wrong verb form
had
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same
Correct article usage
the same
show examples
fate
which
Punctuation problem
, which
show examples
was the reason for the percentage of local research learners to decrease. In 2001, 33657 and 5192
is
Wrong verb form
were
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the
quantities
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numbers
show examples
of
students
Use synonyms
of local and international knowledge receivers
respectively
Punctuation problem
, respectively
show examples
. These figures experienced a noticeable rise up to 39488 and 14593
which
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, which
show examples
represents 54081
Change preposition
in totally
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totally
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total
show examples
. In 2001,
while
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the locals constituted 87%, the other part showed 13%. Out of 13%,
the
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apply
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9%
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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male. Since the percentage of international
students
Use synonyms
increased to 27% in 2010,
that
Correct determiner usage
the
show examples
rates
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also
Verb problem
have also
show examples
changed. The 12% and 15%
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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the
indication
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indications
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of men and
women
Punctuation problem
women,
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respectively.
While
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the 43% of local females declined to 35%, boys
also
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went down by 8%, from 44% to 36%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 89%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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