The pie chart gives information about students who take different courses between 1985 and this year.

The two pie charts give information about students who take different courses between 1985 and

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, it can be clearly seen that in 1985, the highest number of individuals attended modern languages courses( French, German, Spanish) ,

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to attend IT classes. In 1985, the lowest level was 8% for music appreciation,

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14% of people attended cookery classes. The highest number was 24% from modern languages courses;

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, fitness and dance lessons were 22%. Art and local history lessons were the same percentage (17% and 15%) , respectively, showing a balanced distribution among these popular subjects.

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, in

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year, the biggest number was 27% from IT studies,

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the smallest percentage was art 15%. 22% of students are taking classes in fitness and dance. Modern languages (French, German, Spanish) and cookery lectures were almost the same in amount at 17% and 19% respectively.

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The pie chart gives information about students who take different courses between 1985 and this year.

Some people use technology to take advice for their medical problems rather than seeing a doctor. Why this is so? It is positive or negative development according to you?

The education you receive from your family is more important than the education you receive from school. To what extent do you agree with this statement and why? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.