You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer
Dear Madam,
I am a second-year student in a Master's course in English. Recently, I have been moved from my old dorm room to a new one. Despite my repeated requests and extra payment, my requests are not paid head to. I find
this
new arrangement quite inconvenient for me. My new roommate does not care about hygiene or carry out his share of work. The washroom is in a pathetic state and I have to put in time, neglecting my studies to sober up the room. Another issue I face is his habit of listening to very loud music. He listens to music at a loud pace and this
interferes with my ability to concentrate on upcoming exams.
I would prefer my single accommodation back. I am willing to pay more for that service. We have exams scheduled the next month and I want to put all my attention into learning better and scoring higher.
I hope action will be taken in response to my plea.
Thanking in anticipation,
Regards.
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task achievement
To improve task response, ensure you address all parts of the prompt in more depth. While you have described your situation and difficulties well, providing more detailed examples or explanations could make your argument stronger. Additionally, offering more specific solutions or suggestions for your preferred accommodation would enhance your response.
coherence cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, structure your paragraphs more effectively by introducing one main idea per paragraph, and then developing that idea with examples or further explanation. This will make your arguments clearer and your writing more compelling.
coherence cohesion
To enhance logical structure, work on creating a clearer flow between paragraphs. You can do this by using transitional phrases or sentences that clearly link the ideas from one paragraph to the next, making your letter more cohesive.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite