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An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries.What problems does this cause?What solutions can you suggest to deal with this situation?

Currently, many qualified specialists
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, including
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 doctors and
teachers
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teachers,
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 are leaving their home
countries
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. The main reason for
this
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 trend is the insufficient economic and social
development
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 in their nations. To address
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 issue, it is crucial to enhance the quality of professional training by allocating targeted government funds to essential fields
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 as medicine and
education
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, particularly for the
development
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 of doctors and teachers. Every year, more and more specialists leave their
countries
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due to
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 a lack of economic and social
development
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.
This
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 trend has become a serious problem for many developing
countries
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, as it leads to a shortage of skilled workers in vital sectors
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 as healthcare and
education
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.
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, many
professionals
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 from
countries
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such
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 as India and China migrate in large numbers to more developed nations in search of better job opportunities and living conditions. To address
this
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 problem, it is essential to enhance the quality of
professionals
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 by providing government-funded financial support for their
education
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 and training.
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, China has implemented the Thousand Talents Plan, which provides
professionals
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 with high salaries, research grants, and access to advanced research infrastructure.
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, a similar initiative has been introduced in Singapore. Through talent-based scholarship programs, young specialists are trained from an early stage, and those who study abroad are required to return to their home country after completing their
education
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. In conclusion, in order to prevent skilled
professionals
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 from leaving their
countries
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, governments should take concrete measures to retain talent and create better conditions for career
development
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 at home.

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task response
Task response: You answer the task but need more clear steps and more facts to back the plan.
coherence
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general
You show a clear aim to find how to stop brain drain and give ideas to fix it.
content
You use real schemes (Thousand Talents Plan and Singapore) to show a plan can work.
Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Brain drain
  • Skilled professionals
  • Healthcare systems
  • Education systems
  • Economic growth
  • Dependency on foreign aid
  • Social inequality
  • Quality healthcare
  • Quality education
  • Retain talent
  • International cooperation
  • Sustainable growth
  • Scholarships
  • Professional development
  • Remote work capabilities
  • Local research funding
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