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You are taking a holiday in a place recommended by your local travel agent, you have had a wonderful time. You have promised to write to him and let him know what you think of his suggestion. \ Write a letter to your travel agent as promised, and let him know what you have been doing and what you are going to do before the end of the journey.

Dear Hashemi, I hope
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 trip provided a unique opportunity to deepen my historical understanding. I would like to spend more time in
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 place, so I would request you to contact the Hotel to extend my room, since I intend to go to a historical village
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 village yearly holds a culinary festival and presents a wide range of local dishes. I believe that it is a great chance to taste their foods and become informed
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 their culinary heritage. Thank you for your recommendation. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Mohammadreza Hadavi

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structure
Be more clear about the main aim in the first part and keep ideas easy to follow.
coherence
Break long sentences and put one idea in each paragraph for easy read.
accuracy
Check small rules like 'the hotel' and 'annual festival' to keep good form.
tone
Polite tone throughout.
structure
Strong opening and closing.
content
Good detail about what you did on the trip.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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