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Countries are becoming more and more similliar because are able to by the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Countries are turning more similar to each other because they can buy the same
products
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 anywhere globally.
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, there will be a mix of trendy
outfits
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 and
products
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. In
this
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 essay, I'll explain why it's a positive development all over the world, and give my personal opinion
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Firstly
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, people get easily bored with the same product or outfit. So, buying
products
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 or
outfits
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 from different countries can develop a new mix of trendy clothes or
products
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, which increases
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 sales.
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, new
products
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 and
outfits
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 will emerge daily, boosting one's confidence and beauty.
As a result
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, increased profits from
products
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, clothes, and other stuff that will benefit the country.
In addition
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, no product will ever fail because
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 it's bought from all over the world.
Secondly
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, it
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 has its disadvantages by not being unique. Let's say Japan, buying Japanese
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 and clothes will erase its uniqueness, and maybe destroy its way of styling.
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this
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 is only one country, it may be for other countries.
Finally
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, it will be harder for low and unknown-
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 to rise and become popular.
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, no country will have its unique way of styling, which may decrease its popularity
To sum up
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, the positive development outweighs the drawbacks. Yes, more trendy
products
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 and
outfits
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 will be out daily, which increases the popularity of the product. But
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 one can't turn a blind eye to the low and unpopular
products
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 that won't have a chance to become famous and stand out, like the others.

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task response
Plan the essay with a clear start, body, and end. Say your view in the end so the reader knows it for sure.
coherence
Put ideas in a steady line. Use simple linking words like first, also, but, and in addition to show how thoughts go with each other.
language
Use easy words. Check any spelling or mark. Keep the sentences short and clear.
structure
There is a plan in the intro and a view at the end.
content
The writer mentions both good and bad points.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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