The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The first table below shows changes in the total population of New York City from 1800 to 2000. The second and third tables show changes in the population of the five districts of the city (Manhattan, Brooklyn, Bronx, Queens, Staten Island) over the same period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The tables provide information about the total number of people in New York City across five districts over 200 years, from 1800 to 2000,
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details
regarding the
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contribution
as the amount and the percentage of each city. 
Overall
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, it can be observed from the first and second
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that the population has increased
dramaticly
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dramatically
over the years,
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going
up from thousands to millions.
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, the proportion of Manhattan showed a decline even though the number increased.  Taking a closer look,
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Manhattan
recorded 60,515 in 1800, which is 76%
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the total
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citizens
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the number as a whole reached
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1.5 million, the rate
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dropped
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in 2000. 
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Brooklyn,
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, Queens, and Staten Island,
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outnumber
Manhattan by
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approximately
six times, reporting 1,587,109 in 1900 and 6,417,089 by 2000,
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representing
81% of the total
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residents
of New York.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • people
  • city
  • five
  • district
  • grow
  • growth
  • rise
  • increase
  • increase
  • rise
  • fall
  • decline
  • high
  • low
  • big
  • large
  • small
  • more
  • less
  • over time
  • by year
  • in total
  • compare
  • compared with
  • whereas
  • trend
  • pattern
  • overall
  • feature
  • note
  • point
  • difference
  • lead
  • catch up
  • late
  • early
  • century
  • decade
  • period
  • 2000
  • 1800
  • 1900
  • continuous
  • steady
  • rapid
  • fast
  • slow
  • periods
  • numbers
  • data
  • report
  • describe
  • summarise
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