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The maps show the differences between common student room from 5 year ago and its developed version of now.

The maps show the differences between common student room from 5 year ago and its developed version of now.
the
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 maps illustrate the data about the common
lay outs
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layouts
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 of students now and half a decade ago in order to compare.
Overall
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,
couple
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a couple
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 of new amenities were added,
while
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 the quantity of tables
were
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was
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 decreased to make
a
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apply
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room for other
comfortabilities
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comforts
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.
Few
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A few
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 years ago,
in
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on
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 the left
from
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of
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 the entrance, there was a
sebsequence
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sequence
 of facilities, which
allows
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allowed
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 learners
to not
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not to
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 think about the obstacles of lifestyle.The range of facilities involved sink, cupboard, benches, microwave and refrigerator.
While
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 some of them
helps
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help
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 students handle the food preservation and the conditions of meals before consumption, the other ones are multi-functional,
for
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example
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 benches and tables can be used for relaxing , studying and even working out , which is really convenient. When it comes to current luxuries in common rooms,
while
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 from the row of facilities on the left-hand from the entrance
,
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apply
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, one of the benches was replaced by another microwave, everything about
tables
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the tables
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 has changed , from size to locations.Since
diet
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the diet
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 of students is unchangeable and crucial,
drink
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a drink
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 machine was installed.Armchairs were added in order to make the experience of
a
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watching a
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new TV
watching
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apply
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more
delighting
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delightful
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.And the addition of the bench for laptops should
rise
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raise
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 the enjoyment taken from the projects

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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