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Band 3.5

Some people think that social networking sites have a huge negative impact on both individual and society.To what extent do you agree or disagree？

It is usually believed by some
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 that social networking sites have a huge negative impact on both individuals and society . In my opinion, I agree with
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 statement , but some
people
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 may disagree. In
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 essay , I am going to discuss
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 question from both my views and give reasons for my opinion . On one hand , I have some main reasons for my opinion . My first reason is that social networking sites have a significant influence on opinions and personal
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 share Many things about any subject, they learn ideas
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 second reason is that young
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 are affected by ads.
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 makes news accessible .
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 , social networking spreads information fast .
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 means that advertisers increase product awareness.
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, many
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 do not agree with me . They believe that social networking can cause unhealthy habits .
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, the internet is addictive for long periods .
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 , the kids are affected by watching social media programs.
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, almost they has a cell phone and that relative family.
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 , it influences the behaviour of children.
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 , there are no easy answers to
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 question.
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 tend to believe that social networking same time a development experience
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individual
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 and society,and it is important to exchange ideas.

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structure
Plan your essay. Put one main idea per paragraph and use linking words like 'first', 'also', 'then' to show how ideas go together.
organization
Make the start clear. In the first sentence say your view and what you will discuss.
content
Give one clear example for each point. Use simple facts or ideas from daily life.
language
Check grammar. Use correct subject-verb, use plural or singular carefully, and use simple past or present correctly.
idea
You show a clear view that you agree with the topic.
structure
You try to discuss two sides and end with a conclusion.
content
You touch ideas like ads and fast sharing of news.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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