You recently attended a workshop that was useful, but you were not satisfied with some parts of it. Write a letter to the organisers of the workshop. In your letter: explain what the workshop was about describe what you liked about the workshop say what you did not like and suggest improvements

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to share my experience regarding your recent
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on mental well-being.
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, the session was extremely informative, and I gained valuable insights from it. I attended the
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with a friend who has been struggling with depression, and she shared that the activities made her feel emotionally stronger and more confident. There were several aspects of the
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that I genuinely appreciated.
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, the talk on anxiety and depression delivered by Mark Antony, the well-known YouTube influencer, was highly engaging and relatable.
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, I thoroughly enjoyed the creative activities, including painting and art therapy,
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the presentation explaining how
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tasks enhance cognitive development.
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, there were a few issues that I found unsatisfactory.
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with, the seating arrangement was inadequate, as the space was too small for the number of participants, which resulted in constant disturbance.
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, there were no vegetarian lunch options available, which was disappointing and left me attending a five-hour
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without eating. I hope you will consider my suggestions to improve future events. I look forward to your response. Yours faithfully, Anna

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task
Your answer covers the task. It states what the workshop was about, what you liked, and what you did not like plus a suggestion. To raise the score, add a few exact details (date, place, names) and a clear request.
coherence
Make the writing flow well. Use one idea in each paragraph and link ideas with simple words like and, but, also. A short start and end help.
content
Clear aim in writing to organisers
tone
Polite tone and close to the point
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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