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The charts below give information about the number of hours that students study each day at five different universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information about the number of hours that students study each day at five different universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given charts illustrate details about the
number
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 of
hours
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 that
students
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study
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 daily across five different faculties.
Overall
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, as illustrated, the
number
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 of
hours
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students
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study
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 each day varies between weekdays and weekends.
Students
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study
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 more
hours
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 on weekdays than on weekends. On the one hand,
students
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study
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 nearly the same
number
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 of
hours
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 across all the universities on weekdays.
However
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,
students
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 in
University
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 C spend the most time studying, with 10.6
hours
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 per day,
whereas
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students
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 in Faculty D spend the least, with only 9.6
hours
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.
Students
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 enrolled in the other faculties
study
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 between 9.8 and 10.1
hours
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 daily.
On the other hand
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,
time
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the time
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spend
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spent
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 on
study
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 varies from one
university
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 to another during the weekends.
Moreover
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, enrolled people in
universy
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university
 A spend 9
hours
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 studying per day
which
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, which
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 is the highest
between
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among
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 all
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university
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universities
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,
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while
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students
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 from
university
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 D record the lowest
number
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 with only 5,6
hours
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 . For the rest of
faculties
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the faculties
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 , the
number
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 ranges from 6,2 to 8,6.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, hours, students, study, university with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrate" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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