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The graph below gives information on the differences in clothing exports from three different countries

The line graph compares the value of clothing exports from Colombia, Japan and Myanmar between 1999 and 2003.
Overall
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, Colombia experienced significant fluctuations in its export figures,
while
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 Japan showed a gradual downward trend. Myanmar,
on the other hand
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, saw moderate volatility but ended the period higher than it began. Colombia exported the least clothing in 1999, at around 100
million
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 dollars.
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 figure increased sharply to 800
million
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 in 2000 and peaked at about 950
million
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 the following year.
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, exports
then
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 fell dramatically to roughly 350
million
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 in 2002, before rising slightly to around 430
million
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 in 2003. Japan started the period with the highest export value, at nearly 480
million
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 dollars. Despite a small rise to around 530
million
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 in 2000, its exports declined steadily in the subsequent years, reaching just under 400
million
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 by 2003. Myanmar exported approximately 300
million
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 dollars’ worth of clothing in 1999.
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 rose to 500
million
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 in 2000, before dropping to around 350
million
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 in 2001. After that, the figure increased gradually, finishing the period at around 450
million
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • clothing exports
  • country
  • highest
  • lowest
  • rise
  • rise steadily
  • increase
  • fall
  • decrease
  • grow
  • drop
  • change
  • stay the same
  • peak
  • reach a peak
  • hit a high
  • gap
  • difference
  • big gap
  • narrow gap
  • widen gap
  • compared with
  • in contrast to
  • whereas
  • over the period
  • from ... to ...
  • trend
  • pattern
  • overall
  • in general
  • year
  • data
  • show
  • indicate
  • point out
  • lead
  • lead in exports
  • top country
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