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Some people believe that university education should be free for everyone, regardless of income. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

University
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education
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 is one of the
milestone
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milestones
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 for everyone. It would be an opportunity to uplift
people
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's living
standard
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standards
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. Some individuals
relive
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believe
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on
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that
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 every student should be able to reach higher
education
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 without paying. I agree to
above
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the above
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 statement. In the beginning with poor
people
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,
education
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 will be helpful for their
future
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people
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. So they haven’t
more
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spent more
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 money
spend
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apply
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on higher
education
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. Some
people
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 earn money only
for
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to
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 put food on the table.
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, one of my best friends
she
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apply
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come
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comes
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with
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from
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 a poor family. After the advanced level
exam
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exam,
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 she
got
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passed with flying
colors
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colours
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and
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, and
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 she got
select
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 to
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University
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the University
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. Fortunately, my
country
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 offers higher
education
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 for free.
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 of
that
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that,
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 now she
doing
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is doing
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 a white color job and
earn
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earns
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big
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a big
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 fortune. From that
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people
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, people
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 can improve their
life style
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lifestyle
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.
This
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 is
a
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one reason why higher
education
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 should be free.
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, if
university
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education
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offers
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is offered
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for free
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free
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free,
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 it is of paramount
important
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importance
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 for the
country
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’s future because student don’t
give-up
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give up
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 their higher studies. As a
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country
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country,
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 we’ll can be rich with educated
people
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 and we can economically succeed.
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,
recently
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a recently
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 published article said, “since 10 years in
UK
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the UK
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, they
offer
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have offered
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 free
education
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 and comparing
about
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apply
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before and after that,
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country’s
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the country’s
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economy
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economic
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 situation
gradually
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has gradually
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 increased”. Students
are
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play a crucial role in a
country
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so
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, so
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that
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apply
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we should give
everything
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them everything
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 as much as we can. In conclusion,
university
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education
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 should be free because student can broaden their horizon and
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on
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, on
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 the other
hand
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hand,
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 it should be a blessing for the
country
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.
This
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 essay explains why I agree to some extent with
this
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 statement.

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Task Response
Clarify your position. State clearly how far you agree or disagree, and keep that view through the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
Build clear paragraphs. Start with a topic sentence, then add a simple reason or example, and finish with a link to the next point.
Lexical Resource
Use careful and precise words. Avoid wrong word pairs and word forms. Keep language simple and correct.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Fix grammar often. Watch verb forms, prepositions, and word order. Use short, simple sentences if needed to avoid mistakes.
Task
You show a belief that free university can help poor students.
Evidence
You use a real life example to support your point.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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