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Some people suggest that a country should try to produce all the food for its population and import as little food as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, an increasing number of
people
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 are concerned about the
food
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 source
,
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 some of them support
that
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apply
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local
food
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instead
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most
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apply
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of
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import
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imported
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food
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,
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.
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However
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, whether
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import
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importing
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food
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 from other
country
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countries
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 is a controversial issue. My view is that
government
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the government
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 need to keep
balance
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a balance
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 between local
food
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 and
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import
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imported
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food
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.
First,
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it is
obviously
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obvious
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 that
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import
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imported
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food
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 can enhance
people
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’s choice diversity.
This
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because
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is because
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of
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people
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has
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have
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 eaten local foods for years,
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import
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food
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 can bring freshness to them.
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, lots of
people
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 in
this
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 world love to share
food
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of
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 their own country, some of the
food
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only can
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can only
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produced
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be produced
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 in special places,
people
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 want to taste it at home only
by
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import
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 it. So,
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import
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imported
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food
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 is essential for
people
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’s daily life.
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, importing
food
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 can enhance the relationship with other countries.
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 means that importing
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 is a diplomatic way for
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the government
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.
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, importing
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 from
poor
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a poor
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 country can support them
financial
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financially
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benefits
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apply
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,
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this
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these
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 financial benefits can help lots of children
from
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with
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food
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 / living / education, even
the
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apply
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job
position
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positions
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.
Therefore
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, importing
food
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not
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is not
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 only available
with
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citizen
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citizens
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, but
also
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have
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has
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politics
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 benefits.
That is
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 not to say that only eating local
food
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 is not good. Of course, local
food
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 has lots of positive aspects,
such
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 as safety. But
according to
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 the law of
food
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,
the
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food
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 safety can
guarantee
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be guaranteed
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 in most
of
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countries. In summary,
food
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import
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 is a positive thing I agree with, and it
have
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has
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much
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many
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benefit
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 aspects. Meanwhile,
government
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the government
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 cannot ignore developing local
food
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. Only by doing so can we make sure that both benefit
on
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from
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 diplomacy and
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the citizen
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citizen
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citizens
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.

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task response
Make your stance very clear in the introduction and again in the conclusion.
coherence
Start each paragraph with a topic sentence and keep one main idea per paragraph to improve flow.
content
Add more precise examples and connect them directly to your point.
grammar
Check word form and grammar to avoid mistakes (e.g., 'import' vs 'importing', 'have' vs 'has').
content
The essay notes both local and imported food, showing awareness of the topic.
coherence
Attempts to balance diplomacy with everyday needs.
structure
Some use of linking words and overall structure is present.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • food security
  • domestic production
  • import dependency
  • political instability
  • sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • nutritional deficiencies
  • comparative advantage
  • agricultural methods
  • local economies
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