The chart below illustrates the number of international students applying to universities in a European country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main points and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below illustrates the number of international students applying to universities in a European country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main points and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below illustrates the number of international students applying to universities in a European country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main points and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the figures of students from different
countries
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China
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, Japan, the USA, and Russia -
applied
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who applied
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to universities in one European country from 2004 to 2008.
Overall
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, the number of students from
Russian
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Russia
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remained stable and the lowest throughout the years. It is
also
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notable that
China
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experienced a sharp decrease,
while
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the USA rose significantly. Looking more closely at the data, in 2004,
China
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provided more students than the other
countries
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, at approximately 27500 people.
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, the figure
continue
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continued
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to decline significantly to around 17500 in 2006 before reaching a plateau by 2007. In 2008, it dropped to just over 15000.
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, the USA started from roughly 14000 people and began to rise over the period.
This
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number increased to the same level as
China
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in 2006, at nearly 17500, and followed by a considerable growth to about 27500, becoming the highest among all
countries
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. The trend for the remaining
countries
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were
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was
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more steady than the above.
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Japan witnessed a slight increase from just above 5000 in 2004 to nearly 1000 in 2008, the figure for Russia was relatively unchanged, staying at around 2500 between 2004 and 2008.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, china with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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