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The chart below gives information about birth and death rates in Switzerland from 1970 to 2020 according to United Nations statistics.

The given bar chart illustrates data on the
rates
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 of death and
birth
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 in Switzerland over a period of 50 years, starting from 1970.
Overall
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,
although
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 the
rates
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 of
birth
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 increased over the period, the figures for death decreased from 1990 to 2020. At the beginning of the period, the
birth
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rates
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 were well over 1
million
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.
While
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 it levelled off for 10 years, it continued an upward trend to reach above 3
million
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 in 2020. Turning to other charts, the death
rates
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 started at just under 1
million
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. Between 1980 and 1990, it went up. Surprisingly, it fluctuated around a generally declining trend to receive just over half of
million
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, which was much lower than that of
birth
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rates
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words rates, birth, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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