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The table and pie chart give information about the population in Australia according to different nationalities and areas.

The table and pie chart present the data about
people
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 who live in the
countryside
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 or in the
city
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 in Australia and their
nationality
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the Australian
people
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 have the highest percentage of
people
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 living there. The table shows that the majority of
community
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the community
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live
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lives
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 in the
city
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. Looking at the pie chart , there are 73 per
cent
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 of Australian
people
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 live in Australia
and
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, and
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 at the same time, it is the most popular
nationality
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 in the country.
British
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people
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 are almost ten times fewer than Australians , which is 7% of
all
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the
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population
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. New Zealanders account for 3% of the total
population
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, which is 4 percentage points lower than that of the
British
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people
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. The total
population
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 of Chinese
people
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 in Australia is 2 per
cent
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. The lowest
one
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apply
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nationality
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 is Dutch
people
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 , which is 1% of the whole
population
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. The other
nationality
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 makes up 14%, which in total is more than the
British
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, the Chinese , the Dutch and the New Zealanders in summary. Looking at the stats , a large number of
people
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 prefer to live in a
city
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. There are 70% of Australian
people
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 who live in the
city
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 and 20% who live in the
countryside
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. The
British
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 who live in the
city
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 are 89% which is 9% more than Australians , and there are 11% in the
countryside
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.90 per
cent
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 of New Zealanders live in cities,
while
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 10% in the
countryside
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 . The highest percentage of
people
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 who live in the
city
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 is the Chinese, there are 99 per
cent
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 and only 1% who live in a different area . The
last
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 one is the Dutch
people
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, where 83% live in the
city
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 and 17% in the
countryside
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, countryside, city, nationality, cent, british, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographic data
  • population distribution
  • nationality groups
  • urban planning
  • cultural diversity
  • social policy
  • demographic trends
  • rural vs. urban distribution
  • reflect on the implications
  • cultural exchange
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