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Band 6.5

The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport.

The table chart shows the information about the
number
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 of
trips
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 made in one major city between 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from middle school using different types of
transport
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.
Overall
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, from the chart
the
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, the
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children
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 who choose
the
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apply
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walking as
the
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their
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transports
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transport
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is
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are
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 the most and the
children
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 who choose
the
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apply
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cycling as
the
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their
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transport
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is
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are
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 the least. In all different types of
transport
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 the cycling was the least only 2
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millions
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million
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and
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, and
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the
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apply
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car
passenger
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passengers
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was
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were
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 the
most
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most,
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 had 11
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millions
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million
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 total
number
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 of
trips
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. The walking had 6
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millions
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million
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 total
number
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 of
trips
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,
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then
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the
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bus
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 had 5
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millions
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million
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 total
numbers
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number
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 of
trips
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,
walking
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and walking
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 and
bus
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 had 3
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millions
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million
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 total
number
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 of
trips
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. In 2020, 12.5
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millions
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million
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children
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 chose walking as a
transports
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transport
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,
the
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and the
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children
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 who chose
the
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apply
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cycling and walking
and
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, and
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bus
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 had almost
same
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the same
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people
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number
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 at 6
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millions
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million
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.
The walking
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Walking
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 about 2 times of
bus
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,
chose
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choosing
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bus
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the bus
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 as a
transport
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 had 6.5
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millions
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million
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, trips, transport, children, millions, bus with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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