Fast food is becoming one part of life everywhere; this has bad effects on our lifestyle and diet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fast
food
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has
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an integral part of people’s daily life around the world, which has
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a bad
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impact on lifestyle and
health
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.
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fast
food
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offers some practical benefits, I strongly agree that the
over consumption
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of junk
food
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has a negative effect on
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qualitiy
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quality
of life. One main reason why fast
food
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has become so common is that it saves effort and
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time. In modern societies, many people have a full schedule and long working hours, which makes
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preparing
home cooked
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home-cooked
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meals very difficult, so it
easier
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is easier
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to grab a meal from outside.
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, the increase in fast-
food
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outlets has provided consumers with a greater variety of meal options.
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, employees and students often
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choose
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fast
food
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because it is easily available and so affordable. Another reason to agree with
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view is that fast
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has harmful effects on
health
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. Most fast
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meals contain a high level of fats, salt, and sugar, which can lead to serious
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problems.
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, people who regularly consume fast
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are more likely to suffer from obesity, heart disease, diabetes, and stomach diseases.
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, relying on
this
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type of
food
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can badly affect both
health
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,
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lifestyle and
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serious problems. In conclusion,
although
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fast
food
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can be reliable, affordable and sometimes delicious, I believe that its negative impacts on
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outweigh its benefits.
For
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this
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reason, people should limit their consumption and try to cook their own
food
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on
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home.

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grammar
Fix spelling and grammar errors, for example: prepareing -> preparing, qualitiy -> quality, home -> at home.
grammar
Make sentences clear. Check subject and verb, and use 'it is' or 'it’s' where needed.
coherence
Use linking words to smooth flow, like 'First', 'Then', 'Also', 'However', 'Therefore'.
task response
Add a small balance. Mention any good side of fast food, then say why you still think it is bad.
lexical
Keep words simple and from the top 100 list.
content
The writer shows a strong view and keeps it in the essay.
structure
The essay has a clear plan with intro, two body parts, and a conclusion.
content
Health ideas are shown with examples of problems.
analysis
The end states a clear choice.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • Proliferation
  • Obesity
  • Diabetes
  • Caloric intake
  • Addictive
  • Nutritional deficit
  • Culinary traditions
  • Healthcare expenditure
  • Immediate gratification
  • Lifestyle diseases
  • Homogenization
  • Processed foods
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