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Some people think that online learning is more effective than traditional classroom learning.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

With the development of technology, there is an ongoing debate about whether online learning is more effective than traditional
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 online learning is more convenient,
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 learning can be more high-quality through interaction. On the one hand, online learning can enhance the efficiency of learning through its flexibility. Because online learning is flexible in both time and space,
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 can arrange their own schedule and pace
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 situation. Simultaneously, in terms of some important or difficult content,
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 can watch them repeatedly, meaning that
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 will have a deeper understanding and stronger memory
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 knowledge.
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, the efficiency of learning will be improved.
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, online learning relies heavily on perfect technological support and
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’ high self-discipline,
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 it may just effective
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On the other hand
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,
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 learning builds a strong link between
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 it can be more effective compared with online learning. As traditional
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 learning provides opportunities for
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 and
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 to communicate face to face,
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’ problems can be posed and corrected immediately,
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 studying online may not have access to solve these problems in time.
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,
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 can adjust their way of teaching
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’
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 during their interactions.
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, the interaction between
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 will reduce
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’ misunderstanding and make knowledge
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. Research conducted in Shanghai,
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, shows that the
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 who always interact with
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 tend to have better academic performance compared with those who do not interact. In
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 learning should be seen as the better way to improve
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’
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 quality; it should be taken as the main
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 mode
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 of online learning in the
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. In conclusion,
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 to learn
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 is better for
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’ long-term progress in
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 quality.

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task response
Make your view clear in the first paragraph and restate it in the end.
task response
Add more facts or details to back up your view and cover more ideas.
coherence
Use topic sentences to start each paragraph.
language
Check for small grammar mistakes and use short, plain sentences.
content
Clear use of 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand' to show two sides.
structure
Intro sets position and conclusion sums up.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • online
  • class
  • classroom
  • study
  • learn
  • home
  • teacher
  • student
  • course
  • lesson
  • exam
  • grade
  • task
  • homework
  • time
  • money
  • save
  • plan
  • schedule
  • focus
  • motivation
  • discipline
  • practice
  • talk
  • speak
  • listen
  • read
  • write
  • group
  • team
  • friend
  • question
  • answer
  • example
  • choice
  • mix
  • balance
  • future
  • goal
  • internet
  • computer
  • phone
  • screen
  • eye
  • help
  • easy
  • hard
  • better
  • worse
  • there
  • because
  • need
  • want
  • use
  • place
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