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Some people believe that in the future, environmental problems will mean that we are unable to live on this planet. In order to survive, the human species will need to find another planet that can support life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. STEP 2 - Write your answer words 252/500

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Introduction
The
Environments Issues
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environmental issues
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spreading
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are spreading
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 all around the
planet
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,
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.
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The minority says that we
cant
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can't
 survive anymore.
for
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For
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 that
;
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,
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 we need
new
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a new
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planet
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 to live
, in
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on, in
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 my
opinion
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opinion,
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its
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it's
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 impossible to
acheive
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achieve
this
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 Point Of view .
Body paragraph 1
Humans are responsible for their actions
which
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, which
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 is
crusial
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crucial
 to accept the results
, many
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. Many
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 pollution problems
effected
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affect
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 the
wild lide
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wildlife
, sea creatures and even more
,
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. For
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for
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example
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example,
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 many
type
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types
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fish
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of fish
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has
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have
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 been infected
due to
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 bad air consumption
,
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.
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However
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However,
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 awareness could be a major key factor for
better
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a better
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 sea
,
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. For
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for
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example
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example,
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organization
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organisations
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 that care about
sealife
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sea life
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 and so on.
Body paragraph 2
In addition
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 , wildlife is very important for nature balance
, any
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. Any
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 insect or animal
have
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has
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 an important
in
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role in
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 the nature balance
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; therefore
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therefore
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therefore,
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 it can impact many areas
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such
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, such
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 as the weather and the heat
temporature
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temperature
,
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.
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in
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On
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 the other
hand
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hand,
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 the
goverment
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government
 can impose rules and very strict
instuction
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instructions
 to protect
the
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apply
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wild life
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wildlife
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for
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, for
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example
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example,
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 stop hunting and start being so careful
wih
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with
forest
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the forest
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 .
Body paragraph 3
Furthermore
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 ,
the
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apply
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education is
big
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a big
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 step for
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a better
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better
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better,
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healthy
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healthier
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planet
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 , increasing
awarenss
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awareness
 about the
enviroment
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environment
 and forcing kids to learn new green habits will change the whole
proscpect
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perspective
, in
fact
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fact,
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 children tend to be very easy to learn
somthing
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something
 new .
Conclusion
In conclusion ,
its
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it's
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 not
logicallly
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logically
 possible to leave the
planet
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ans
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and
 search for
new
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a new
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 one
but
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, but
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speading awarenss
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spreading awareness
 and forcing new rules to respect the
enviroment
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environment
 is the must call to action
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that need
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need
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needs
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 to be educated and done .

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planning
Plan your answer before you write. State your view in one line in the start.
structure
Write an introduction that says what you think and what you will talk about.
organization
Make each paragraph talk about one idea. Start with a topic sentence.
coherence
Use simple join words (and, but, also, because) to link ideas.
language
Check spelling and grammar. Use punctuation to end sentences.
content
Give one or two clear examples for your points. Keep them easy and true.
idea
You show a view about the topic and try to answer the task.
coherence
You use some linking words to join ideas.
content
There is an effort to give examples.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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