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in some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both sides and express your opinion.

People
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's earnings are subject to discussion among
community
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the community
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 in some countries, rather should being regulated by authorities,
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 others believe it is beneficial for the
country
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 and individual
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. In my opinion,
people
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 should take what they deserve and enhance the economic status of their
country
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. On the one hand, some may argue that different classes in society appear , and the number of poor
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, the lower class
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, and the middle class will increase if it is not regulated by authorities.
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this
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 reason, they believe that if laws and regulations are implemented, poverty will decrease over time and the economic
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 of society will be improved.
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, enforcing a limit on higher salaries will decrease the difference between rich and poor
people
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. Another example, it will decrease the purchase price , and so poor
people
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 can buy their food without any help.
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, it is advantageous for the
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 on an individual
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.
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, receiving a good salary will increase the productivity and creativity of the workers, knowing their effort is not wasted and will be paid back.
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,
people
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 should earn what they deserve.
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, a worker in the medical field will spend a 24-hour shift , and the other worker in the office workplace will spend 8 hours only
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thus
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, it is unfair if they receive the same salary. In conclusion, I believe that the economic status of the
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 is not connected to the salaries of
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, and a salary should depend on the worker's efforts and productivity
level
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.

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structure
Plan your essay before you write. Start with a clear view and list the two sides you will talk about.
structure
Make each paragraph tell one main idea with a short topic sentence, then give an explanation and an example.
lexical
Use only simple words where possible and keep sentences short to show clear meaning.
content
The essay shows both sides and gives your view.
coherence
Use of linking phrases like On the one hand / On the other hand.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • wealth inequality
  • economic growth
  • motivation
  • talent acquisition
  • consumer spending
  • tax revenue
  • redistributing wealth
  • market forces
  • income disparity
  • social stability
  • freedom of choice
  • meritocracy
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