Some people say that it is not possible to be happy without money while other things that money does not guarantee happiness. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reason for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience.

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people
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say
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happiness
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happyiness
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happiness
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various perspectives to define their own definition about what is
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does guarantee
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. The reason is they associate
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and some physical conditions
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as sufficient food, water or living.
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have a mindset that
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bring rich and
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worries
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life
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. No worries and
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freely
living in here that already
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happiness
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in their definition.
Then
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, they
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correlate
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and all entertainment items
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as travelling, playing
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tennis and surfing. These
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make
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feel
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and need
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to guarantee they
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these
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but do not influence their
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daily routine.
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or bring
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,
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living already
deserves
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without
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and
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happiness
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does not
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, some deemed taking a coffee in
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already is
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more
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kind of
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tend to pursue mental sufficient. Their living has not
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, more pursuing mental energy
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. In the modern world, the whole world is inclusive
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different perspectives can be allowed. In the above discussion, these are entirely different types of
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come
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from my internal satisfaction.
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in the morning
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enough
make
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me feel
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happiness
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. It is because
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correlate
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with
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and
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. It makes us ultimately
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money
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to
fulfill
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our physical living
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task response
Be clear on your view. Start with a line that shows what you think.
structure
You try to talk about both sides.
idea
Some good idea about money and happy life.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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