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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The
table
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 and
pie
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charts
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 show the data on the police budget in 2017 and 2018 in a particular
place
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part
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 of Britain. The
table
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 explains the source of the
money
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and
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, and
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 the two
pie
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charts
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 give information about the distribution of
police
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the police
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 budget.
Overall
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, the general trend of the
table
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 is slightly increasing.
Further
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, the
pie
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charts
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 undergo diverse changes in every
categories
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category
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. The
table
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in
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is
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 categorised by 3 different sources, which are National Government, Local taxes, and Other sources. All of them experienced a rising number of
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money
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income
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 from 2017 to 2018. The most significant growth is from local taxes, which is more than 11 million pounds.
In contrast
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,
money
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 from other resources
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such
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, such
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 as
grants
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grants,
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 increases
only
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by only
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 half a million pounds, which is the least elevation.
On the other hand
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,
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this
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these
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 two
pie
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charts
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depicts
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depict
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 the percentage of how the
money
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spent
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was spent
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 in 2017 and 2018, grouped by 3 different fields too.
Firstly
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, the least spent is on the field of technology. But it shows an elevation
for
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of
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 almost 2x of the initial percentage in 2017.
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, buildings and transport categories remain constant for a year.
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, the highest
spent
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spending
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 in both years is for salaries. But it experienced a reduction of 6%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words table, pie, charts, money with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget
  • allocation
  • distribution
  • funding sources
  • grants
  • taxation
  • revenue
  • expenses
  • personnel costs
  • operational costs
  • community safety
  • law enforcement
  • financial dependency
  • prioritization
  • trends
  • analysis
  • implications
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