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Band 6.5

The bar chart shows the waste of collection by recycling center from 2011 to 2015.

The chart illustrates the data about the
waste
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 that
sent
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was sent
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 to
recycling
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the recycling
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center
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centre
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in
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over
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the
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a
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 4-year
life span
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period
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.
Overall
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, all the figures experienced noticeable fluctuations. The indication of
paper
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waste
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 was dominant almost all the time,
while
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 the
garden
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 rubbish showed
completely
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a completely
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 opposite scenario. In 2011, the highest rate was about 57, which
prescribed
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indicated
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 the dominance of
paper
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 leftovers. Followed by glass scrap, which represented approximately 48. Both
paper
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 and glass
waste
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 showed a significant decrease to 50 and 40, respectively. In 2011, before following the trend, tins and
garden
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 leftovers accounted for approximately
35
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35%
 and
32
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32%
,
relatively
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respectively
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. A year later,
garden
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waste
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 witnessed a substantial decline, representing
near
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nearly
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 15,
while
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 tins showed 28. In 2013, the
waste
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 from glass surpassed the
paper
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 refuse. The tins and
garden
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 scraps showed
same
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the same
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 rates as in the initial year. In the next 2 years, the
indication
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amount
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 of
paper
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 rubbish dramatically rose from 50 to 70.
In contrast
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, leftovers from other collected materials, whose growth was by 10 for each.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words waste, paper, garden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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