Small, independent shops will have no place in the future. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Do you agree or disagree? Note down a few points which support your opinion.

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regarding small independent
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no place in the future has become increasingly debated among
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individuals.
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some people believe yes,
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before presenting my own position. One primary reason for
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is continued innovation.
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is because
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of technology often brings driving economic growth and
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human capabilities through advancement.
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was famous
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physicals
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copies of movies in
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20’s,
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went bankrupt when streaming
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platforms
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like Netflix came into the market.
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is quite evident that small shops should
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need
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and change with innovation before it is too late. Another compelling reason is that small shops are often reluctant to adapt to these changes.
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they think they are either too good with their product
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are often arrogant to make changes. A
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example for
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would be Nokia and Blackberry. Though they had the means to adapt
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were often reluctant
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they
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with what they produce
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obviously led to their downfall.
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,
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my view that irrespective of the size, if not adapted on
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they will often see downfall in the future. In conclusion,
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I believe
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that if
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one fails to adapt with
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this
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would often lead to not having
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a place
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in the future. Irrespective
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of whether
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it is a small shop or a big technology giant
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does play
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a major factor
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in the survival
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of
business
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a business
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task response
Make your view clear in the first sentence and keep it in your writing.
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Give one main idea per paragraph and use a short example to back it up.
coherence
Use simple linking words to show order, like first, then, also, finally.
coherence
Write topic sentences that tell the main point of each paragraph and end with a link to the next.
task response
A clear position is stated.
coherence
Some good examples are given to support ideas.
structure
The essay keeps a simple plan with three parts (intro, two body, conclusion).
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