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You recently attended a series of English lessons in a language school. However, you were unhappy with the teaching quality. Write a letter to the director of the school. In your letter: • explain why you chose to study English at the school • describe the problems you had with the lessons • suggest how the classes could be improved

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing with regard to the English lessons I recently attended at your language school. I chose your institution based on mostly positive online reviews, which encouraged me to enrol in a series of courses.
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, I believed that your school would provide a supportive and professional learning environment.
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, the main issue was the lack of preparation and organisation in the lessons.
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 the teachers were friendly, they did not seem well prepared for the classes.
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, they had difficulty managing the classroom, which negatively affected the learning atmosphere.
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, the
overall
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 quality of the lessons did not meet my expectations. To address
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 problem, I would suggest providing additional training for teachers before they begin teaching.
In addition
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, introducing regular evaluations could help maintain a higher teaching standard. Thank you for your consideration. Yours faithfully, Sam

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Add more exact examples of the problems and how they affected your study.
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Give a short plan of what you want the school to do next time.
structure
Try to keep one idea in each paragraph and use simple linking words to connect ideas.
tone
Polite and respectful tone.
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Clear reason for choosing the school.
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Clear suggestion for how to improve.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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