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the graph show the map of islip center. describe it

The maps portray how the Islip town
centre
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 will change in the future.
Overall
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, the
centre
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 will undergo considerable transformations , particularly in terms of urbanisation. At present,
shops
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 are surrounded by the main road. Behind the northern
side
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 of the
shops
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 is the countryside. As for the southern
side
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 of the
shops
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, houses are located.
Furthermore
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, the first
side
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 path from the western part of the map provides access to the school.
Also
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, the park is situated on the right
side
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 of the map. Regarding prospective developments, the main road will be converted to a path solely for pedestrians.
Although
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 the southern part of the
shops
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 will remain unchanged, the northern part will be knocked down. Another key point to consider is that
instead
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 of the countryside, a bus station,shopping
centre
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 and car park will be constructed.
Furthermore
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, the path structure will be altered , and it will surround the
centre
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre, shops, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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