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Nowadays the trend of fashion changes very rapidly, and gradually people become the slaves of it. Some people think that a person should choose comfortable clothes he or she likes, regardless of fashion. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for tour answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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the modren
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modren
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modern
world
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world,
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 the trend of fashion
become
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has become
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crucial
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a crucial
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 matter and many
people
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opsision with
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oppose
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shoping
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shopping
.I strongly agree that
individual
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individuals
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 should wear comfortable
clothes
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 rather
than if
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whether
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 it trend or not .To discuss
this
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phenomenon
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phenomina,
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 we should
hilght on
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highlight
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 some brands and
exessive
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excessive
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 manufacturing.
On
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 major reason is
,
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apply
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to make
people
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 possive with fashion is the massive amount of
clothes
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,
alot
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a lot
 of
store
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stores
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everywekend
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apply
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new
clothes
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 .That shows
pepole desier
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people desire
 to buy
deffirent
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different
kind
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kinds
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 of items .
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, many
celabrate
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celebrate
people
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engaruge
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engage
 to follow the trends
consederable
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considerably
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, that
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that
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which
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 is something related to
civilasition
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civilisation
. Another significant reason is, the quality of
clothes
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 of some brands
are
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is
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valu
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valuable
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Zara
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this
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 brand does not
consederd
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consider
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it use
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use
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uses
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 a good
vibrec
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vibe
.
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,it has
spicific
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specific
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shows
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show
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a variaty
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variaty
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variety
 of
clothes
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evryday
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every day
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atract
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attract
people
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 to buy
countinious
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continuously
. All in all, I
belive
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believe
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 that everyone should wear the
disindgn
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design
 that
make
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makes
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 them feel
lightness
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light
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 and cool without
care
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caring
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 about trends or fashion because
this
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just
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is just
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for
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to
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 gain
mony
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money
 and
advertisment
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advertisement
 to
ingcreac
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increase
sele
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sales
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 and
famuos
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fame
.I think
buy
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buying
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 a good quality and
comfort
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comfortable
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 vibrec is crucial rather than
follow
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following
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 the trend.

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language
Fix basic spelling and grammar to make ideas clear.
structure
content
Essay shows a clear view on comfort over fashion.
content
Some ideas are touched, showing you can discuss the topic.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fashion
  • trend
  • clothes
  • comfortable
  • comfort
  • choice
  • personal
  • taste
  • agree
  • disagree
  • reasons
  • examples
  • experience
  • health
  • cost
  • price
  • spend
  • save
  • time
  • wear
  • fit
  • weather
  • work
  • job
  • interview
  • confidence
  • style
  • image
  • balance
  • practical
  • simple
  • layer
  • quality
  • value
  • waste
  • environment
  • peer
  • pressure
  • ads
  • budget
  • timeless
  • durable
  • care
  • occasion
  • respect
  • culture
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