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the graph below shows information the amounts of waste produced by three companies A B C from 2000 to 2015

The linear graphs provided information regarding the quantities of
waste
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 generated by three companies from 2000 to 2015. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that data for
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company
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companies
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 A and B exhibited a downward trend during 15
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years
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15-year
 timeframe,
while
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figure
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figures
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 for
company
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 C showed an upward pattern in the supplied
period
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. At the inception of the
period
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 in 2000, the
waste
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 output created by
company
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 A emerged as
dominant
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the dominant
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 figure at 12
million
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tons
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,
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however
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,
this
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 pattern experienced a slight decline until the end of the
period
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 and finished under 9
million
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tons
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.
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, the
amounts
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amount
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 of
produced
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waste produced
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waste
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for
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by
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company
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 B stood as the second
significant
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in
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at
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 the start of
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period
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the period
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 at under 9
million
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tons
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 and witnessed a notable
ascent
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increase
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 in the next 5
years
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 and peaked at over 9
million
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tons
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. In the
last
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years
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, it displayed a remarkable decrease and terminated at approximately 3
million
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tons
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 yearly.
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,
merely
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apply
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company
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 C represented a gradual rise over 15
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years
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15-year
period
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 and surpassed the volumes of
waste
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 product generated by
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company
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companies
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 A and B in 2010 and
2015
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2015,
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 respectively. Intriguingly,
company
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 C appeared
shared
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to share
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 the largest proportion with more than 9
million
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tons
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at the end
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 of 2015.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words waste, company, years, period, million, tons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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