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The map below shows the development of the museum between 2010 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given map compares the prior layout and the
overall
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 changes of the museum after 3 years
construction
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, between 2010 and 2013. In general, it is evident that the museum is modernised with improved infrastructure and enlarged territory. In 2010, there was a garden and a main building, where 6 amenities
served
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were served
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there
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apply
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. In detail,
ticket
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the ticket
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 desk was placed between
an
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the
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 entrance and
a
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the
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 lobby, before entering the main observation area. An ocean hall was the first attraction of the museum, and a mammal corner
in
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on
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 the
left-side
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left side
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,
while
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dinosaur
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the dinosaur
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 gallery was situated below that second object.
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, the green space was covered
in
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on
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 the right-hand
of
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side of
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 the building. After 3 years, the constructed territory increased in size
to
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in
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 the right direction and 5 new amenities were installed
,
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consequently
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, the garden was completely diminished. The new building had a shop, a cafe, a human origins display, and the mammal observation was moved there. Two latest displays, an ice age and an insectarium, had
also
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 been installed in the prior area, right in the old mammal site.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: The word "display" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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