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n the past, lectures were used as a way of teaching large numbers of students, but now with the development of technology for education, many people think there is no justification for attending lectures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Historically, large numbers of
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 were taught by way of
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. With the advances of communication technology, some people have argued for the adoption of alternative methods of education.
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, I disagree with the argument that technological development has rendered
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 obsolete. A common criticism of
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 is that
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 do not encourage independent thinking.
Lectures
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 are often
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 compared to religious or political indoctrination, in which the audience
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 seldom allowed to
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 the speaker or call their views into question. Critics have
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 argued that new technologies have allowed
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 number of
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 to be educated
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 allowing
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 to learn at their own pace and to find alternative sources of information.
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, in my
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lectures
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 remain an important part of
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' education.
Lectures
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 allow for efficient introduction to
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ranges
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 of ideas, which can guide
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 to expand on those ideas in their own time.
Lectures
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also
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 allow
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 to ask questions directly to professors, unlike pre-recorded materials
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 don't usually provide a way for
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 to comment or question the teachers. Technological solutions aren't contradictory to
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, either. Learning materials
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 as books or quizzes can be provided online to complement a lecture. In conclusion, technological development is unlikely to render
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 unnecessary. As discussed,
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 an important facet of a student's education, and
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 technology can be used to complement
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, it is unlikely to replace
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.

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task
Say your view in the first paragraph and keep it clear all the way.
task
Give one or two clear reasons with small, real examples to back them up.
coherence
Link ideas well; use simple joins like and, but, also, so.
grammar
Check the grammar, and keep subject and verb in line (lectures are not lectures is).
style
Use short, clear sentences to help the read.
strength
You show a firm view that lectures still have use.
strength
Some good linking words are used.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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