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The bar chart shows the average number of hours students in five different universities studied.

The bar chart provides data on the proportion of average
hours
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 in terms of five diverse universities studied on
weekdays
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 and
weekends
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.
Overall
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, the graph makes it evident that there wereof the essence differences in the proportion of studying
hours
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.
In particular
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, the largest amount of
hours
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spent
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is spent
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 on
university
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 B ,
university
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 C and
university
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 E on
weekdays
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,
whereas
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 the smallest amount is spent on
university
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 C at
weekends
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.
University
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 B,
University
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 C and
University
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 E were the dominant ones
at
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on
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weekdays
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, comprising around 10
hours
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,
while
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 these figures were lower at
weekends
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, making up 8.0
hours
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, 7.8hours and 6.2
hours
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.
By contrast
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, on
weekdays
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,
university
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 A and
university
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 D exhibited similar results at just over 9.5
hours
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. As for
weekends
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, where studying in
this
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 field was slightly lower, constituting, 9.0hour and 5.4
hours
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, in turn.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, weekdays, weekends, university with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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