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The table below give information about the amount of beer and fruit juice consumed per person per year in different countries.

The tables display the
consumption
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 values of
beer
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 and
fruit
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juice
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 in multiple countries
categirized
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categorised
 per capita per year.
Overall
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, the
consmes
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apply
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amount
of are
Verb problem
consumed
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vary
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varies
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 between
the country
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countries
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 except
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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,
And
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and
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 in some
country
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countries
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Punctuation problem
, driniking
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driniking alchool
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drinking alcohol
 does not have
large
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a large
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 effect
the
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on the
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 amount of
juice
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 that
person
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a person
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 drinks
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. This
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this
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case
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 appears in Germany. In
general
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general,
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 countries like Ireland, Belgium and Denmark
which
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, which
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 ranked top 5 in
beer
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consumption
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,
cant not
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cannot
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 be found in
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fruit
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the fruit
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juice
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 list,
that
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which
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show
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shows
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 the result of
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consumption
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consuming
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 high
quantity
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quantities
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 of
Beer
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.
Nevertheless
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,
this
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case
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does
Verb problem
is
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 not applicable in
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case
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the case
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 of Germany, which is in the top tiers of
consumption
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both
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of both
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liquid
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liquids
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.
In
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On
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 the other hand, large
consumption
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 of
fruit
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juice
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 can
lead
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sometimes lead
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 some time to
dramatic
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a dramatic
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 reduction in
drining
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drinking
beer
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,
this
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case
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 is very clear in Canada. In
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the Netherlands
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Netherlands
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Netherlands,
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 the
case
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 is
differnt
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different
consumption
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 of
beer
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 and
fruit
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juice
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bot
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both
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rank
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ranking
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 in ninth place.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, beer, fruit, juice, case with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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