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In many countries, large infrastructure projects are increasingly funded and managed by private companies rather than governments. To what extent do you think this is a positive or negative development?

It has been pointed out that there has been an increase in the number of private organisations that fund and manage major development programs
instead
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 of the government in many nations. Personally, I believe that
this
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 is a completely positive shift as it has benefits not only for infrastructure development but
also
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 for citizens. First of all, private companies supporting a large infrastructure project can improve efficiency. The reason is that compared to the authorities, companies owned by individuals are able to access more professional workers,
such
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 as designers and engineers, which makes the building process more efficient and productive.
For instance
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, a huge number of officials who are responsible for construction programs state that it is hard for them to attract professionals to work for the local governments
due to
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 lower salaries, which causes difficulties for them to develop facilities.
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, private firms normally make more profits by participating in large building projects, which allows them to offer higher salaries to attract well-qualified workers to work for them,
thus
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 enabling construction to be completed more efficiently.
Furthermore
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, private investment in infrastructure projects can reduce the financial stress on every single person.
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 is because large facilities normally require a huge amount of money to construct and manage, and if the government leads a project, the funds will be raised through higher taxes,
thus
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 enhancing the financial burden on every taxpayer, which is detrimental to the quality of life for all. As an illustration, when the authorities fund major programs
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 as highways or airports, the cost is often covered by higher taxes, which can place a financial burden on citizens. In conclusion,
although
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 people may vary in their opinions about whether corporations owned by individuals take over governments to construct important public facilities is an improvement or not, I am of the opinion that
this
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 is a thoroughly positive trend as it benefits the construction and every single person.

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task response
For task response: Your opinion is clear, but you should also show why some people may see this change as bad, then explain why you still think it is good. This will make your answer more full.
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For task response: Your ideas are good, but some points are a bit general. Add one more clear and real example for each main point.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: Your essay is easy to follow, but some long sentences are hard to read. Use shorter sentences sometimes.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: Linking words are used well, but do not use too many cause-effect phrases in the same way. Try a wider range of simple links.
task response
For task response: You answer the question directly and your position is clear from the start to the end.
task response
For task response: Your main ideas are relevant to the topic and stay focused on private companies and public projects.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: Your essay has a clear introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: Each body paragraph has one main idea and good support.
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