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n recent years, many people have adopted a minimalist lifestyle, choosing to own only essential possessions. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this way of living?

From the remains of the late XX century modernist movement and a new global shift towards
anti consumerism
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anti-consumerism
, a new “style” of living arose -
minimalism
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. Coined by its simplicity and practicality,
minimalism
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 swept around the world
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 the new craze. So what made
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 lifestyle so popular
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 what may it lack? On the advantageous
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 we have the
anti consumerist
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anti-consumerist
 worldview. If seeking to embrace practicality and efficiency,
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 trend provides the ideal blueprint. People can achieve better spending margins and
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 their space more efficiently, manufacturers can
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 efficient mass production,
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and even
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 the living environment planners can embrace practicality - a
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win-win
 situation for all.
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 we see the "shallowness" of it all. Fundamentally,
minimalism
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 tends to lean towards a worldview which eliminates all emotional connection to the material world in favour of production efficiency.
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 eventually leads to the “great grey sludge”, where the environment begins to lose colour and beauty. Naturally, it leads to great dissatisfaction for a person living in it.
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 we can see the clear distinction between
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the disadvantages
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 and advantages of
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 a lifestyle. It becomes quite obvious that
minimalism
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 is not perfect and that we should be careful when creating the environment which surrounds us
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 it may lead us to unpleasant consequences.

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Answer both sides more fully. You talk about good and bad points, but each side needs more clear detail.
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Add one or two real and clear examples, like saving money, less stress, or feeling a home is too cold and plain.
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Explain your ideas more. Some lines are too general, so the reader wants more support.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, middle, and end, which is good.
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Use linking words with more care. Some parts sound strong but not fully connected to the question.
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Make each body paragraph focus on one main idea, then add support before moving to the next point.
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You answer the question by giving both advantages and disadvantages.
coherence and cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are both present and easy to see.
coherence and cohesion
The essay is easy to follow in general, with a simple paragraph plan.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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