n recent years, many people have adopted a minimalist lifestyle, choosing to own only essential possessions. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this way of living?

Nowadays
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people tend to choose to live a minimalist
lifestyle
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. Everything from clothes to house interior is minimalistic.
Minimalism
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can be a great way for keeping things simple, clean and cheap, but at the same
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minimalism
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could lead you to losing your identity
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tend to remind us of sadness
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and
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depression
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.
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, the biggest advantage that a minimalistic
lifestyle
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offers is the cost. It’s generally low. The main thing about
minimalism
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is keeping things simple and owning only necessary possessions.
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type of
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doesn’t take up much space, nor does it require a lot of money. It’s an amazing way to escape
nowadays consumeristic culture
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consumeristic culture nowadays
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by choosing only what's essential.
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,
minimalism
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offers simplicity
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can help us breathe from our flashy,
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fast-paced
daily routines. Choosing
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what to dress and cleaning your house is so much easier when everything is structured and simple.
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,
minimalism
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doesn’t show who you are. In simple words: you are losing your identity. Stacks of unnecessary possessions are not just trash
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they tell a story. They tell who you are.
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doesn’t reveal your identity
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in
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it hides it.
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minimalism
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usually offers bland
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colors
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colours
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. White, black and grey
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colors
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dominate the world of
minimalism
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. These are
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the
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colors
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that are associated with
depression
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. Surround yourself with
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, dress like
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and
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you will slowly merge into the depressive environment. In conclusion,
minimalistic
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a minimalistic
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lifestyle
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is amazing for people who want to keep things cheap and
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escape everyday flashiness by enjoying simplicity. But
minimalism
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is robotic, bland and boring. You can’t express yourself, tell others who you are,
you
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and you
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just
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simply drown in structure and
depression
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. You simply lose what makes you original. What makes you - you
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Answer both sides in a more even way. The bad side is stronger than the good side.
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Add one or two clear real life examples to support your ideas.
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Some ideas are too strong, like saying minimalism means depression. Use a more careful and balanced tone.
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Your essay has a clear start, body, and end, which is good.
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Make each main point more fully explained before moving to the next one.
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You clearly discuss both the good and bad sides of a minimalist life.
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Your main ideas are easy to understand.
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The essay is well organized into paragraphs.
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Your introduction and conclusion are both clear and relevant.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

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